Yesterday in class, before you began your blog review, you revised two passages of student writing that integrated quotations from Writing Analytically. The original passages and my revised versions appear below. Return to these sample revisions as you continue to plan your final reflection. Note how I have integrated the quotations more gracefully, omitted unnecessary words, and eliminated passive voice and weak diction. Also note where I have corrected spelling and punctuation errors.
Original
The article “Integrating Quotes into your Paper” from Writing Analytically was the most helpful source that we were given. In the first paragraph of this article, it discusses, “An enormous amount of writers lose authority and readability because they have never learned how to correctly integrate quotations into their own writing.” (Rosenwasser/Stephen, 231)
Revision
In “Integrating Quotations Into Your Paper,” the most helpful section of the textbook, the authors note that “[a]n enormous amount of writers lose authority and readability because they have never learned how to correctly integrate quotations into their own writing” (Rosenwasser and Stephen 231).
Original
In Writing Analytically by David Rosenwasser and Jill Stephen in chapter eight the section on “Integrating Quotations Into Your Paper” helped me better understand how to do citations. In the reading Rosenwasser and Stephen addressed “always attach a quotation to some of your own language; never let it stand as its own sentence in you text” (Rosenwasser, Stephen 231).
Revision
“Integrating Quotations Into Your Paper” helped me better understand how to compose citations. In that section of the textbook, Rosenwasser and Stephen advise students to “[a]lways attach a quotation to some of your own language; never let it stand as its own sentence in your text” (Rosenwasser and Stephen 231).
Next Up
Tomorrow in class you will compose a short reflective essay focusing on the aspects of the course that have benefited you most in the second half of the semester.
Jane Lucas 