Yesterday in class, before you began typing your revisions, I checked your journal exercises that addressed both the opening of “The Falling Man” and the textbook’s authors’ suggestions for paragraph writing. My version of that exercise follows.
The authors of Writing Analytically recommend that “[i]f you find a paragraph growing longer than half a page–particularly if it is your opening or second paragraph–find a place to make a paragraph break” (Rosenwasser and Stephen 308). Junod does not follow that advice in the opening of “The Falling Man.” He opts instead to begin his article with a paragraph of more than four hundred words.
If Junod had chosen to divide the first paragraph, where might he have divided it?
Junod might have started a second paragraph with the words “[i]n all the other pictures,” because there he shifts the focus from the Falling Man to the photographs of other people who jumped from the Twin Towers. An opportunity for a third paragraph comes with the words “[t]he man in the picture, by contrast,” where Junod turns his attention back to the Falling Man. And he might have begun a fourth paragraph with “[s]ome people who look at the picture,” because there he shifts to viewers’ perceptions of the Falling Man.
Generally, one hundred to one hundred and fifty words is a suitable paragraph length. As a rule, you should begin a new paragraph when you present a new idea or point. If you have an extended idea that spans multiple paragraphs, each new point within that idea should have its own paragraph. But the first paragraph of “The Falling Man” defies convention. For Junod, choosing not to divide the first paragraph creates an unbroken movement that parallels the unbroken downward flight of his subject, the Falling Man. Outside of the photograph, “he drops and keeps dropping until he disappears” (par. 1). With “disappears,” the last word of the paragraph,” the Falling Man disappears from the page, and Tom Junod turns to the photographer, whom we learn later in the essay is Richard Drew.
Works Cited
Junod, Tom. “The Falling Man.” Esquire, vol. 140, no. 3, Sept. 2003, pp. 176+. ProQuest, https://libproxy.highpoint.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/ magazines/falling-man/docview/210268344/se-2.
Rosenwasser, David and Jill Stephen. “The Idea of the Paragraph.” Writing Analytically, 9th edition. Wadsworth/Cengage, 2024. pp. 307-313.
“Anyone Who Had a Heart . . .”
Any of you who had hearts–paper ones with lace doilies, distributed last Friday–could have earned bonus assignment credit for composing a Valentine and posting an image of it on your blog. Kudos to Nick Beeker, Madsion Davis, Sophia Marin, Dylan Virga, and Sierra Welch for taking the initiative to create Valentine’s Day greetings for loved ones.
Nick Beeker, who titled his post “Valentines Day,” wrote, “This word filled heart was sent to my childhood best friend Cameron. As he is going off to boot camp for the Marines. I am very proud of him!”
Madison Davis, who titled her post “Happy Valentine’s Day <3,” wrote, “I made this valentine for my mom because she has been my valentine every year until this year, so now that we have moved on from the tradition of her getting me a valentine, I wanted to make her one to let her know that I am still thinking of her, even when I have my own valentine. Happy Valentine’s Day mom!”
Sophia Marin titled her post “A Valentines to My Best Friend.”
Dylan Virga, who titled his post “Happy Valentine’s Day,” wrote, “My friend is Brazilian, and back in the 2014 World Cup, Brazil lost to Germany 7-1 which is one of the worst blowouts in sports history. So I like to tease her about it every now and again.”
Sierra Welch titled her post “Valentine <3.”
Bonus Assignment Opportunity
Directions
- Determine which of the five Valentine’s posts is the strongest in terms of composition. Since each post features both an image of the hand-crafted card and its written text, think of the composition not solely as the words composed but instead as a combination of the words and image. You may also consider the writer’s commentary, where present, and the title of the blog post itself.
- Compose a comment of one complete sentence or more that includes (1) the first and last name of the writer, and (2) a brief explanation of the Valentine’s effectiveness.
- Post your comment as a reply to this blog entry no later than 9 a.m. tomorrow, Friday, February 20. (To post your comment, click on the post’s title, and scroll down to the bottom of the page. You will then see the image of an airmail envelope with a leave comment option.)
I will approve your comments (make them visible) before Friday’s class.
Next Up
Wordplay Day! To prepare for class, revisit the Dictionary and World Builder pages on the Scrabble website, or the Merriam-Webster Scrabble Word Finder page, and review the blog posts devoted to Scrabble.
Jane Lucas 
In my opinion, Sophia Marin’s valentine has the strongest composition. This is because of her hand writing and the warm lighting, the combination of these two things make it a nice valentine to read.
I think Sophia Marin had the best composed Valentine. This is because it is a casual converatsion, but is aso express’s how much she appreciates her friends, and is thankful for eveything they have done!
Madison Davis’s post “Happy Valentine’s Day <3” I believe was the strongest in terms of composition. Madison had a great explanation adding true meaningfulness about making the valentine for her mom. Furthermore, the picture of Madison’s post was the most creative with the heart, pen, Pandora, rice crispy, and chocolate bar.
In my opinion, Sierra Welch had the best valentines post. I like how it is a spin off of the common “Roses are red, Violets are……” phrase but adds some humor that is most likely personalized to the recipient. I enjoy the visual appeal on how the words perfectly fill the heart and the heart drawings around the writing.
I believe that Sierra Welch’s Valentines post was the strongest in terms of composition because she became very creative with her words. It did not only make me laugh, but also made me think of the person that she was writing to and what inside jokes they may have, or at least what shared laughs they probably have together on a regular basis. It was very thoughtful, sweet, and funny, and I love how it was presented. Great job Sierra!
Dylan Virga’s Valentine’s post has a strong composition because he didn’t use much words but he used visuals . In his explanation he explained the meaning behind the images and it also revealed that he cares for his friends interest for soccer, and the images shown are images that only them two can understand which makes his post strong because it shows care , but also intimacy and a drawing only them two will know the meaning of .